Short paper

[SoulPlay]

Shitsureishimasu, im on the verge of applying for a 30 day cultural trip to japan, and part of that applying process involves some aid from some organization i dont know. Anyways, in accordance to what the application states, im supposed to write a short paper on how going to japan this winter might make me a better person or develop useful skills..right.. so im about to throw the towel here. Yes id love to go to japan, yes i would find it extremely enriching, but on how that would benefit me... i just dont know how to express it, i dont even know where or how to start, being that english is not my first language, add some extra toughness to this assignment. tonikaku, back to my point, do you have any suggestions on the matter. no im not asking you to do the paper for me, but, just some cool interesting points to write about, cultural references perhaprs..i dont know, something other than "i like anime". As a sidenote, im a double major: modern languages, one of them being japanese, and in international relations. Thank you for you patience if you've taken the consideration to have read up to this point, and feel free to comment. Shitsureishimashita.

[Henjin]

How about you enjoy being stared at, so you just know you'll love being a gaijin in Japan!

[Pierrot le Fou]

In a cultural melting pot like the US (I'm assuming you're from the US or an equivalently diverse country), people are constantly exposed to different cultures, different languages, and different upbringings than themselves. But there is a common thread is the place you live, and the existence of cultural mores that you are being assimilated to, or that your culture is judged upon.

By going to Japan, you'll have a chance to experience a culture without a reference point that you know. You'll experience a culture and people of other cultures who are all reacting to a different culture. You will experience the differences of culture first hand rather than being taught about them in a class, or picking them up through demonstration.

Through that exposure, and the language barrier, you will be able to relate better to immigrants and various other cultural groups in your country of origin when you come back.

[Henjin]

I decided to stare at any Japanese people I see here... Is that what you mean?

[SoulPlay]

Wow pierrot, thank you very much. I really apreciate it.

[SoulPlay]

In a cultural melting pot like the US people are constantly exposed to different cultures, different languages, and different upbringings other than their own. I walk on the street only to greeted by Brenda, the nice American lady running that convenience store, call a cab and find myself submerged in a conversation about the current situation in New Orleans with Carlos, the Mexican driver whom I always call, and give my Cuban friends a hearty “buenas noches” before going to bed. This is all part of a regular day here in Tampa. I get exposed to a diverse set of cultures on a daily basis, and for that I’m grateful that I’m part of such a large society America is, but most of the times, if not all of the times, all I get from that kind of exposure is some culture references, and maybe, if the subject is fairly outgoing, some update on the current status of his country, and that’s it. For me, that will not suffice.

My major is International Relations therefore every time I find myself involved in that “how’s life in your country?” type of conversation I feel I’m never getting what I wanted and always looking for a chance to go beyond that. Unfortunately, I never got that chance before, not until I was admitted to Eckerd. I am proud to say this is why I submitted my application to Eckerd. Eckerd is the current leader in providing College undergraduates with the chance to study abroad, with students often taking that chance more than once and doing it a second time. Now the time has come for me to take that chance, and I’ve set my heart on it.

By going to Japan this winter term, not only I would be fulfilling my high school dream of getting to know one of the many fascinating cultures around the world, I’ll have a chance to experience a culture without some reference point given to me by Japanese colleague. I'll experience a culture and people of other cultures who are all reacting to a different culture. I will experience the differences of culture first hand rather than being taught about them in a class, or picking them up through demonstration and culture meetings. For the first time in my life I’ll be able to experience a country from totally different perspective, nothing will be simulated; everything will come straight from the source. No longer will I have to listen to my friend’s stories from that time they visited that country, but I will have stories of my own, to tell my friends and possibly my children. I know that now is that time when you need to take a hold of every opportunity you are given because that opportunity may not be present tomorrow. Today I’ve been given the opportunity to expand my limits and go that extra mile. This is the reason I’m applying for this program. This is the reason next January I’m definitely going to Japan.

[erbiumfiber]

I couldn't tell if the sponsoring organization is Japanese (is Eckerd the sponsor? Aren't they the drugstore chain?). If it is, then you might want to consider putting in something complimentary about Japanese society. For example, coming from a society in which the individual is everything, you wanted to see a society where people work cooperatively on behalf of a group to achieve a larger goal, yada, yada. I do have to say that my workplace is much more cooperative than any workplace I've experienced in America. And for a law firm (where I work) that is really saying something...

[SoulPlay]

eckerd is my college... lol.

[Trump]

If you are still looing for material....

Just talk about why you want to go! I mean, are you fascinated by the culture? If so what aspects and then discuss how being immersed in that culture would affect you. Are you interested in the spiritual side of things? Economic? Pop culture? Talk about something you really want to do while you are there and what you would gain from the experience. Specifics are great.

[Masa the Masta]

If you are still looing for material....

Just talk about why you want to go! I mean, are you fascinated by the culture? If so what aspects and then discuss how being immersed in that culture would affect you. Are you interested in the spiritual side of things? Economic? Pop culture? Talk about something you really want to do while you are there and what you would gain from the experience. Specifics are great.

If that were the case, I'd be fucked.

"I WANT 2 GOE 2 JAWPANN CUZ I WANNA C KODA KUMI XD"

Literally. I really do want to see Koda Kumi. :rolleyes:

That and maybe attend a SuperGT or a D1GP round.

...And eat the food.

And get lost. Damnit! I have good reasons to go. :mad:

[Henjin]

Agent007's essay:

I've always had a 'thing' for Asian wo*REJECTED*

[Xenotrauma]

omg, agent stole my essay ;_;

[Pierrot le Fou]

In a cultural melting pot like the US people are constantly exposed to different cultures, different languages, and different upbringings other than their own. I walk on the street only to greeted by Brenda, the nice American lady running that convenience store, call a cab and find myself submerged in a conversation about the current situation in New Orleans with Carlos, the Mexican driver whom I always call, and give my Cuban friends a hearty “buenas noches” before going to bed. This is all part of a regular day here in Tampa. I get exposed to a diverse set of cultures on a daily basis, and for that I’m grateful that I’m part of such a large society America is, but most of the times, if not all of the times, all I get from that kind of exposure is some culture references, and maybe, if the subject is fairly outgoing, some update on the current status of his country, and that’s it. For me, that will not suffice.

My major is International Relations therefore every time I find myself involved in that “how’s life in your country?” type of conversation I feel I’m never getting what I wanted and always looking for a chance to go beyond that. Unfortunately, I never got that chance before, not until I was admitted to Eckerd. I am proud to say this is why I submitted my application to Eckerd. Eckerd is the current leader in providing College undergraduates with the chance to study abroad, with students often taking that chance more than once and doing it a second time. Now the time has come for me to take that chance, and I’ve set my heart on it.

By going to Japan this winter term, not only I would be fulfilling my high school dream of getting to know one of the many fascinating cultures around the world, I’ll have a chance to experience a culture without some reference point given to me by Japanese colleague. I'll experience a culture and people of other cultures who are all reacting to a different culture. I will experience the differences of culture first hand rather than being taught about them in a class, or picking them up through demonstration and culture meetings. For the first time in my life I’ll be able to experience a country from totally different perspective, nothing will be simulated; everything will come straight from the source. No longer will I have to listen to my friend’s stories from that time they visited that country, but I will have stories of my own, to tell my friends and possibly my children. I know that now is that time when you need to take a hold of every opportunity you are given because that opportunity may not be present tomorrow. Today I’ve been given the opportunity to expand my limits and go that extra mile. This is the reason I’m applying for this program. This is the reason next January I’m definitely going to Japan.
First of all, please do not take what I wrote word for word. It's just bad form. Use the sentiment if you'd like, but change the wording to something better. Also, the style of writing is kind of rambling throughout. If I were to rewrite it, I'd make it shorter and simpler.

1st Paragraph: The difference between Cross-Cultural Awareness vs. Cross-Cultural Experience
2nd Paragraph: Cross-Cultural Awareness in the US (spanish, cuban, etc. in Tampa, simply)
3rd Paragraph: Cross-Cultural Experience Opportunity in Japan (a notch on your travelling belt)
4th Paragraph: Application to study (International Relations, how one can understand another country through being there better than any amount of study. Macro-relations vs. Micro-relations)
5th Paragraph: Opportunity for a cultural experience that will enrich your understanding of your own country's multi-cultural facets, the culture of another country, and that will provide insight into your academic career.

Make each paragraph 2-3 sentences. Make them short, simple, and direct. Don't use big words if you don't have to (in other words, if they don't lend anything to the essay but extra characters -- there's no need to say 'suffice to say I was intrigued by the puzzling asymmetry between the two divergent cultures in which I had been enveloped' if you can just say 'I was shocked at how different the two cultures were.' Beauty in simplicity). And most of all, have it reflect what you believe, rather than writing it as if you are more interested in the person reading it than you are in writing it.

[SoulPlay]

This is the new essay, opinions please.

People think that by having acquaintance with someone from a different cultural background, they are experiencing that culture. They also think that by knowing a foreign language they are getting to know a lot about the culture they are referring to. I believe otherwise. I believe that the right to say that you have knowledge is granted to those that are given the chance to experience a culture by themselves, visiting the country. I’m a living example of that.

My birth certificate may say that I’m a US citizen, and that is true, but ever since I was 4 I’ve lived in a small island called the Dominican republic, just southeast of Tampa, where I live now. My parents are Dominicans so in my household Spanish was the language used. I started studying the English language at the age of 5 and to the date I keep studying it, even though I’ve been told numerous times I’m fluent. Before coming to Florida, I thought that it wouldn’t be much of a difference living here; I knew the language and I had my daily doses of Friends, MTV and The O.C., what could go wrong? Words cannot express the humongous mistake I made by thinking that way.

Knowing the language proved to be a great advantage here, but in many cases throughout my weekday, I found myself totally confused on the expressions, points of views, even the way of approaching matters here. I was so used to a conservative approach to everything in my life, as enforced in the Dominican culture, that I just couldn’t comprehend the liberalism found in USA; some things didn’t just didn’t go through. I felt that I was in the culture by knowing the language, but at the same time so left out on it by not living here. This was what fueled my interest in international relations.

International Relations is for me a special major, focused on how the great leaders of our society deal with us, the people, and at the same time deal with other leaders of other countries. I must admit this is hard job that requires lots of skills and qualities found in only but a few, but I feel that even though these leaders were elected by us, and represent an important role in the future of our society, they are making decisions as if we didn’t matter at all, as if they didn’t know the people who elected them. I’m confident to say that I’m not the only one who feels this way. I live, study and work to change that. I’m taking the opportunity god has given me by letting me go to college just to be able to exercise international relations and study global politics as if people mattered, and this takes time and little steps, but the first step I’m taking is getting to know the people and their various cultures.

One of these cultures is the Japanese one; it’s the one culture I feel most far away from, both in distance and in comprehension. This doesn’t stop me, au contraire, it fascinates me beyond imagination. The Japanese culture is one particular culture (I’ve heard from people who resided there for sufficient time to have enough strength in their opinions) that possesses some of aspects that, even if you lived there for the rest of days you will never take the grasp of; you may know the language, you may know the people, and you may now as many customs as your time staying there has made possible, but you’ll always feel you are missing something. It’s a culture so vast and so different from ours that normal situations here in the US may seem out of the explicable and strangely and more commonly enough, situations I would describe, for a lack of a better word, weird, are seen on a daily basis. While some people are set aback by these aspects of the Japanese culture they only further motivates me to study them. I think it has to do with human’s natural drive to want to know what they can’t understand but many years ago when I first saw what is considered the ambassador of Modern day Japanese culture, anime, I literally fell in love with the culture; and as I make my plans for January 2006, I hope ill fall in love with the people; for my sake and for the sake of the people I may better influence product of the knowledge I’ll gain next winter term.

[NERD]

Too much I's. Try to say that in a different way.

[SoulPlay]

Yes i know, i think i tried too hard on making it about me, but ill try to fix that after a couple of more comments.

[Mushu]

There are some words missing or need to be removed or added. Here is what i think is needed, might be wrong as english is my third language :D :
I started studying the English language at the age of 5 and to this date I keep studying it,
I just couldn’t comprehend the liberalism found in USA; some things just didn’t go through.
I must admit this is -a- hard job that requires lots of skills and qualities that is only found in few small things like that

o yeah try to leave out the anime part if you can as it's not a valid reason and doesn't really suit your mission here imo.

thats all i came up with right now, its 5 in the morning and i need sleep. ill go through it tomorrow again or when you have changed it as i dont think is the final product.

[Pierrot le Fou]

Corrections in RED.

People think that by knowing someone from a different cultural background, they are experiencing that culture. They also think that by knowing a foreign language they are getting to know a lot about the culture they are referring to (Note: I believe that language understanding is critical in cultural understanding, and I don't know if suggesting otherwise is necessarily a good thing. It is your choice though). I believe otherwise. I believe that the right (Is it really a right?) to say that you have knowledge is granted to those that have experienced a culture by themselves, through visiting that country. I have had experience with that.

My birth certificate may say that I’m a US citizen, and that is true, but ever since I was 4 I’ve lived in a small island called the Dominican republic, just southeast of Tampa, where I live now. (<- Run on Sentence) My parents are Dominicans so in my household Spanish was the language used (The household language was spanish/spanish was our household language, may be better phrasings). I started studying the English language (Why say 'the english language' when just saying 'english' would be shorter and mean the same thing?) at the age of 5 and to the date I keep studying it (and I still study it means the same thing and is shorter), even though I’ve been told numerous times I’m fluent. Before coming to Florida, I thought that it wouldn’t be much different living here; I knew the language and I understood my daily dose of popular American TV, what could go wrong? Words cannot express the humongous (I would change 'humongous' to something a little more conventional) mistake I made by thinking that way.

Knowing the language proved to be a great advantage here, but in many cases throughout my weekday (do you really need to say 'throughout my weekday'?), I found myself totally confused on the expressions, points of views, even the way of approaching matters here. I was so used to a conservative approach to everything in my life, as enforced in the Dominican culture, that I just couldn’t comprehend the liberalism found in USA; some things didn’t just didn’t go through ('just didn't register' sounds better). I felt that I was a part of the culture by knowing the language, but at the same time so left out of it by not living there (you are referring to the culture as something separate from yourself, so referring to it as 'here' would be odd). That is what fueled my interest in international relations.

International Relations is for me a special major, focused on how the great leaders of our society deal with us, the people, and at the same time deal with other leaders of other countries (I'm 99% sure they know what int'l relations is, and that it's special to you since they know you majored in it, plus the writing is terrible). I must admit this is hard job that requires lots of skills and qualities found in only but a few, but I feel that even though these leaders were elected by us, and represent an important role in the future of our society, they are making decisions as if we didn’t matter at all, as if they didn’t know the people who elected them. I’m confident to say that I’m not the only one who feels this way. I live, study and work to change that. I’m taking the opportunity god has given me by letting me go to college just to be able to exercise international relations and study global politics as if people mattered, and this takes time and little steps, but the first step I’m taking is getting to know the people and their various cultures. (This entire paragraph doesn't fit in with, well, anything. Discussing becoming a world leader, which is pretty-much what the paragraph implies, isn't really a great reason to get sent to Japan. Discuss how international relations requires cultural understanding, and how Japan can provide you with that cultural understanding to help you understand the gap between another foreign culture)

One of these cultures is the Japanese one; it’s the one culture I feel most far away from, both in distance and in comprehension (stating that you want to go to Japan because you feel you understand it the least isn't a good idea. It suggests that you know nothing about it, even if you try to explain what you meant in the next paragraph. Fascination by ignorance or the lack of understanding isn't something to brag about). This doesn’t stop me, au contraire, it fascinates me beyond imagination. The Japanese culture is one particular culture (I’ve heard from people who resided there for sufficient time to have enough strength in their opinions) [The statements in those paragraphs are 600% unnecessary. You're basically saying that your beliefs are justified because of convincing people who lived there, rather than arguing the point on its merits) that possesses some of aspects that, even if you lived there for the rest of days you will never take the grasp of; you may know the language, you may know the people, and you may now as many customs as your time staying there has made possible, but you’ll always feel you are missing something. (and then you go on to say that it's impossible to understand anyway, which brings up the question, 'Why even bother sending someone who feels they can never understand?') It’s a culture so vast and so different from ours that normal situations here in the US may seem out of the explicable and strangely and more commonly enough, situations I would describe, for a lack of a better word, weird, are seen on a daily basis (And calling the culture 'weird' won't earn you points either). While some people are set aback by these aspects of the Japanese culture they only further motivates me to study them. I think it has to do with human’s natural drive to want to know what they can’t understand but many years ago when I first saw what is considered the ambassador of Modern day Japanese culture, anime, I literally fell in love (one does not literally fall in love. Unless one literally falls into the middle of two couples making passionate monkey love, and mid-readjusting thrust trajectory, you fall into place like a T tetris block) with the culture; and as I make my plans for January 2006, I hope ill fall in love with the people; for my sake and for the sake of the people I may better influence product of the knowledge I’ll gain next winter term.

Yeah, okay, so you started out semi-strong, and then lost any concept of what you were trying to say or why. Your essay read as follows:

Studying and experiencing cultures are very different.

I know because I have experienced two cultures.

The second culture experience shocked me despite all the studying I had done.

That's why I studied world leaders and want to become a world leader who cares about the people unlike leaders today.

Which brings me to Japan which is a country that nobody can ever really understand because of their culture which my friends told me can't be understood even in a lifetime which just makes me want to understand it more so I want to go.

And I fell in love with Japan literally because of anime which is something about the culture that I really want to study and learn though it can't be learned and I want to go because of the weird things that happen every day because of what I saw in a cartoon.

That's one sentence per paragraph. You think you can figure out where your essay got derailed and stopped making good points?

[SoulPlay]

Thank you so much, your word in this post and this entire forum, to me is greatly appreciated. I simply cannot express my gratitude. But I've reached a hard spot. Read this:

International relations involve the study of the actors that make up the international system as well as the political, economic, and social relationships between those actors. Culture plays an important role in International Relations because cultural perspectives and belief systems strongly influence the way in which actors view policy problems, both individually and collectively over time, and often determine the solutions they choose to deal with them. One good example is that "When a Japanese prime minister says that he will "do his best" to implement a certain policy," Americans applaud a victory; but "what the prime minister really meant was 'no,' something he could not express in a direct way because of cultural values". This can only be explained because these actors see issues and decisions through the prism of distinct cultural perceptions, and thus are often lead to misconceptions, misinterpretations, and erroneous judgments.

This is why culture plays an important role, to avoid that kind of problem.

Now, my problem is, since ive never been to japan, i have no idea whatsoever what skills or tools the country can provide me to better face that problem.

Id like you to know that i do not only want to go to japan, it is just that right now im studying japanese so i want to intesifiy the study of the japanese language by going there next january for a month, and at the same time get an insight of the culture in a way that it would help me face that problem. How ? There lies the question.

Awaiting your valuable comments , Rodney.

[Pierrot le Fou]

That paragraph was utterly wonderful at explaining how an understanding of culture would help you to forward your education. Why would you go and do something God-awful like tell them that you want a free language lesson, when you can create such a noble and poignant reason like that to go? Tossing in your language learning is rather irrelevant. They will see it on your transcript or whatever they look at when you apply. Focus on things that make you a better candidate than the other 600,000 Japanese students that want to go.

There are a lot of people who just want to go to Japan for no better reason than that they want to go to the Mecca of their hobby. Enough to go around. And they will all be using Japanese language study, or interest in the culture, or whatever to justify their trip there. You on the other hand will show how a trip to this country will benefit you in your education, in your major, beyond it just being the fulfillment of a personal interest, and that's going to give you a step up on all those people.

The goal in these things is to sell yourself. Explain why you're what they're looking for. You don't do that by wallowing with the rest of the people in the realm of truth. Anyone who wants to go wants to for personal reasons. The people who get to go do the best job of putting noble dressing on those personal reasons.

[B MacD]

I'd leave out the crap about anime being the ambassador of modern Japanese culture too..surely you've got something better than that.

[SoulPlay]

It is common belief that by knowing someone from a different cultural background, you are experiencing that culture. It is also common to think that by knowing a foreign language you are getting to know everything about that specific culture. I agree this is critical to ones understanding of a foreign culture, but see it as minimal part. I believe that only by experiencing a culture on its entirety, through visiting that country, one is able to acquire sufficient knowledge to understand a culture. I have had experience with that.

I’m a US citizen, but I spent most of my youth living in Dominican Republic. Anticipating our return to USA my parents made an effort and emphasized my education in English. This was an essential tool later on in my life, aiding me in the process of settling here in Florida this last summer. Later, I realized that I felt as if were a part of the American culture by knowing the language, but at the same time so left out of it by not living there. There was barrier that stopped me from understanding this society. Being treated as a number before when dealing with institutions here greatly contrasted my experience in Dominican Republic. That eventually changed and later became what fueled my interest in international relations. I wanted to understand why I was feeling like this and International Relations is the only major capable of doing this.


International relations involve the study of the actors that make up the international system as well as the political, economic, and social relationships between those actors. Culture plays an important role in International Relations because cultural perspectives and belief systems strongly influence the way in which actors view policy problems, both individually and collectively over time, and often determine the solutions they choose to deal with them. One good example is that "When a Japanese prime minister says that he will "do his best" to implement a certain policy," Americans applaud a victory; but "what the prime minister really meant was 'no,' something he could not express in a direct way because of cultural values". This can only be explained because these actors see issues and decisions through the prism of distinct cultural perceptions, and thus are often lead to misconceptions, misinterpretations, and erroneous judgments.

Going to Japan will give me the opportunity to understand the cultural values of that important nation-state. By visiting and experiencing by first hand this winter term, I will have the opportunity to visit the world renowned organizations present, gaining access to the many principles enforced there to increase efficiency in work. I will also have the chance to familiarize with the many customs present there, ensuring that I gain sufficient knowledge to better the address the problem of cultural screening and ultimately enhancing my ability to make more effective decisions in my career, my job and most assuredly, my life.

[NERD]

Do avoid using words like 'people' or 'they'. When you are writing an essay/letter, you cannot have ambioguous subjects. Have a more definite subject that you are writing about. Also be a bit more aggressive when you are writing about yourself.

But overall I say your second draft is a lot better than the first.

[SoulPlay]

Edited, thank you. You were right. I feel its better this way.

[SoulPlay]

Toned up:

It is common belief that by knowing someone from a different cultural background, you are experiencing that culture. It is also common to think that by knowing a foreign language you are getting to know everything about that specific culture. I agree this is critical to one’s understanding of a foreign culture, but I see it as a minimal part. I believe that one is able to acquire sufficient knowledge to understand only by experiencing a culture on its entirety. I have had experience with that.

I’m a US citizen, but I spent most of my youth living in Dominican Republic. Anticipating our return to the USA my parents made an effort to emphasize my education in English. Knowing the language was an essential tool later on in my life, aiding me in the process of settling here in Florida this last summer. Later, I realized that I felt as if I were a part of the American culture by knowing the language, but at the same time I felt so left out of it by not living there. There was barrier that stopped me from understanding American society. Dominican Republic is such a small country that, when dealing with institutions there, I was addressed by my first name and everywhere I found some distant relative. This made me feel as if I were part of an extensive family; the Dominican family. However here in the US this isn’t the case; you are always addressed as a number. That feeling of separation from society eventually disappeared and later became what fueled my interest in international relations. I wanted to understand why I had felt like this and International Relations is the only major capable of helping me doing this.

International Relations involves the study of the actors that make up the international system as well as the political, economic, and social relationships between those actors. Culture plays an important role in International Relations because cultural perspectives and belief systems strongly influence the way in which actors view policy problems, both individually and collectively over time. This often determines the solutions they choose when facing these problems. One good example is that when a Japanese prime minister says that he will "do his best" to implement a certain policy, Americans applaud a victory; failing to realize that what the prime minister really meant was “no,” something he could not express in a direct way because of cultural values. This can only be explained because these actors see issues and decisions through the prism of distinct cultural perceptions, and thus are often led to misconceptions, misinterpretations, and erroneous judgments.

Going to Japan will give me the opportunity to understand the cultural values of that important nation-state. By taking this winter term, I will have the opportunity to visit the world renowned organizations present, experiencing first hand principles, such as the 5s, in place there to create a better workplace and a productive work environment. I will also have the chance to familiarize myself with the Japan’ s many customs, ensuring that I gain sufficient knowledge to better the address the problem of cultural screening and ultimately enhance my ability to make more effective decisions in my career, my job, and most assuredly, my life.

[SoulPlay]

Well, the paper has been submitted... i appreciate everybody's comment, especially Pierrot effort in aiding me, it has proven to be invaluable. Thank You Pierrot-le-fou. (Ive always wondered why they'd name a character Crazy Pierrot lol)

[NERD]

Pierror le Fou is a French New Wave movie directed by Jean Luc Godard. I'm guessing that's where he got the name from.

[Pierrot le Fou]

Pin-pon.

Exactly right. Good luck Tenma.

[NERD]

It's a good movie too.

[SoulPlay]

Pin-pon.

Exactly right. Good luck Tenma.

Update: They gave me the grant, 1,000 dollars... lol im just missing...say.. 3,850 lol

[NERD]

Bake sale/car wash/random whoring is in order! Ha.

by all means though, good job.

[Pierrot le Fou]

Congratulations! Do I get my 15% cut now?

[SoulPlay]

Thanks... well im basically going to start doing lots pc business, buying electronics in general and selling them wholesale... i need to get the 3850 by november 21st.

[Pierrot le Fou]

Uh... $3850 in a little over a month? That doesn't seem likely to happen...

[SoulPlay]

Well ill be getting 1000 of work study, i already paid 400, that leaves 2450, i can get some from my Dad too, then the rest comes from me reselling DDR ram, ive already talked to OCZ, im waiting on a response from my client, hes willing to buy 100 DDR ram modules as a first shippment, that should give me around a 1000. its a close call, but yeah i think i can make it.

[SoulPlay]

Congratulations! Do I get my 15% cut now?

I can always stop by and bring you something from the homeland? :D Need a "care package" ;) ?