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Pfalzer
08-13-2005, 03:21 AM
The lonely steward of the tempest sorrow, lowers his mirrored gaze from the sun. Beaten and broken is his weary vessal and long are the days he wants of none. Weighed and Measured he has found no others tht can understand his helm doned. Tired and restless he lays in his bed of thorns. Uneasy in rest an he is in life he waits and wants of none. Cracked is the mask he wears, streaked with the mirrors run. His gaze is as deep as the seven leagues that lay beneath this sun. Through seven doors and seven lockers his wanders through these narrowed halls. Departing even those he licks his chapped lips and wants of none. He wants no end and wants no start he wants nothing becuase nothing cannot rot. So fanned will be his anger and tanned will he become. Lowered will his gaze stay as he travels under this alien sun.
-Jamie Craig Greenwood II Improv
KO3AK
08-13-2005, 03:42 AM
The lonely steward of the tempest sorrow, lowers his mirrored gaze from the sun. Beaten and broken is his weary vessal and long are the days he wants of none. Weighed and Measured he has found no others tht can understand his helm doned. Tired and restless he lays in his bed of thorns. Uneasy in rest an he is in life he waits and wants of none. Cracked is the mask he wears, streaked with the mirrors run. His gaze is as deep as the seven leagues that lay beneath this sun. Through seven doors and seven lockers his wanders through these narrowed halls. Departing even those he licks his chapped lips and wants of none. He wants no end and wants no start he wants nothing becuase nothing cannot rot. So fanned will be his anger and tanned will he become. Lowered will his gaze stay as he travels under this alien sun.
-Jamie Craig Greenwood II Improv

You suck .
Pfalzer
08-13-2005, 03:43 AM
k thanks! haha no constructive critism at all?
KO3AK
08-13-2005, 03:47 AM
Nope. None at all.
D-pad
08-13-2005, 03:50 AM
Teh Sux +1
Pfalzer
08-13-2005, 03:51 AM
haha you dont count as a person D_pad
D-pad
08-13-2005, 03:52 AM
haha you dont count as a person D_pad
Lol thank you........I'm not a person.......I AM A GOD!!!! *insert lightning bolts and dramatic music* :D :D :D
Pfalzer
08-13-2005, 03:53 AM
hah... yeah lol a God lol haha yeha i guess so lol just a slong a si can be a monkey tht would be cool...
koku
08-13-2005, 04:08 AM
lol hahahhaha pflazlers always getting picked it's so funny to watch. And he just excerts the right kind of personality that just makes it funny to keep doing it.

pflazler carefull you dont want to be the resident pick on forumite.
Pfalzer
08-13-2005, 04:19 AM
yeah i don know wht to do i suck at comebacks lol they usually backfire... so i sit back idlely smile and am somewhat polite lol u guys are lucky im not otherwise! LUCKY!
Annoying MSN Person
08-23-2005, 01:45 AM
Writing uses the alphabet.

try using numbers instead for real originality.